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Suspended in the stars... by ~Amphy:iconAmphy:



I write letters you’ll never get,
And I shed tears you’ll never feel
Each night when I go to bed.
My feelings I conceal

When I go to school each day
And smile at the passerbys;
Though, each day it seems
Another piece of me dies.

And I wake up at 3 a.m.
Just to check if you’re there
Beside me tonight, in my bed.
I realize that life’s not fair…

But that doesn’t change the fact,
As the moon in the night sky
Arises out of its weary sleep,
Each night without you, I cry.

And waking up is harder still,
To be alone in my bed
While, impressions on my pillow
Leave no signs of your head.

You never were there at times
I needed you the most, it seems;
And yet, it seems you linger still
Ever haunting in my dreams.

And that won’t change the fact,
Like a prisoner behind bars,
I’ll spend each successive passing night
Suspended in the stars…
©2008-2009 ~Amphy
:iconamphy:

Author's Comments

Uh... something that came out at 4 a.m.

Not the usual type of poetry... but no one really reads it anyways so why do I care?

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:iconpuella-pia:
The last stanza is amazing. The last two lines, especially. :thumbsup:

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"To endure is the first thing that a child ought to learn, and that which he will have the most need to know." - Jean-Jacques Rousseau
:iconamphy:
Thank you so much! :heart: :hug:

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Remember when they told you I didn't bite?

...yea, they were wrong...
:iconbutterfly-silhouette:
You write so well : 0 and I totally empathise with this poem. Which is why it means something to me.
But it's so well written. You've got a perfect amount of syllables in every line, and it tells a story, with it's good direction.
And in conclusion, I'm in awe : )
love it.

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X.x.X
MezÁ
:iconamphy:
Wow, thanks on all counts! I'm glad you can empathize. It means something to me too, which is why I think I did it in freeverse. I didn't want to sit down and rhyme something so much as I wanted to vomit out my emotions right then...so i'm not sure how I got the syllables right but hey, i'm glad to hear it :heart: Aww thanks hun, definitely an awesome comment to get :heart: :hug:

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Remember when they told you I didn't bite?

...yea, they were wrong...
:iconbutterfly-silhouette:
I'm glad it was worth it : P and wow. That was freeverse. My freeverse actually LOOKS like vomit. xD
<333

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X.x.X
MezÁ
:iconamphy:
x3 well mine looks like this I guess

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Remember when they told you I didn't bite?

...yea, they were wrong...
:iconamphy:
Actually, this one is fixed. I was confusing the two x3 but it isn't my style...so it's almost like freeverse in fixed meter x3

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Remember when they told you I didn't bite?

...yea, they were wrong...
:iconbutterfly-silhouette:
Okay xD makes it more original too.
Anyway, I like it.

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X.x.X
MezÁ
:iconamphy:
That it does! Glad you like it and thanks for commenting on my poetry! (few dare to read words..for some reason x3) :heart: :hug:

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Remember when they told you I didn't bite?

...yea, they were wrong...

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